Lowkey Long Live Palestine Part 2 Lyrics . I do not own the rights to either the song nor images in this video, this is merely a fan video. these are some of the lyrics i have gathered so far intro not every zionist is jewish, and not eve...
Question: I write song lyrics...are these good?
(Posted by: Nevershoutnever! on 2009-08-09 04:58:26)
I write song lyrics. I'm trying to get a band together. Which is working actually :) Anyway, I'd like to know if these lyrics are good. Please don't give me an answer saying something like "lyrics aren't anything without music " it's really annoying when people do that. And trust me you won't get a best answer if you give me that. And please give me good feedback. I don't just want "good " or "bad ", I want info. Sorry if I'm being so picky, but I've posted questions like these before and I never get any good feedback. Well thanks and here it is - - This is my final goodbye I know you’re ready to die And these are my final confessions To all of my lies You gave it all to me I had no honesty And these are my final confessions I will guarantee These are my final confessions (My final confessions) You never noticed how much I cared for you Until the time came where you couldn’t pull through So deep in this shit you put yourself in Even if you tried you wouldn’t be able to get out of it And you find yourself way up in the sky Cause every single night you’re getting high But my final confessions Tell you that I still cared We said our farewells We both know you’re going to hell And these are my final confessions So listen as I tell You taught me many things They all had a lot to bring And these are my final confessions I’m sorry if it stings These are my final confessions (My final confessions) You never noticed how much I cared for you Until the time came where you couldn’t pull through So deep in this shit you put yourself in Even if you tried you wouldn’t be able to get out of it And you find yourself way up in the sky Cause every single night you’re getting high But my final confessions Tell you that I still cared Take the time you have left To think about your every regret And the confessions I made to you tonight Because there’s a fire in my head And it keeps burning bright And it won’t go out Until you say your last goodnight These are my final confessions (My final confessions) You never noticed how much I cared for you Until the time came where you couldn’t pull through So deep in this shit you put yourself in Even if you tried you wouldn’t be able to get out of it And you find yourself way up in the sky Cause every single night you’re getting high But my final confessions (My final confessions) My final confessions You never noticed how much I cared for you Until the time came where you couldn’t pull through So deep in this shit you put yourself in Even if you tried you wouldn’t be able to get out of it And you find yourself way up in the sky Cause every single night you’re getting high But my final confessions Tell you that I still cared Thanks again...and it might not be that great considering I wrote it in 15 minutes from 11:15 to 11:30 at night.
Answers:
Posted by: Kelsey W on 2009-08-09, 05:03:43
Its great! lol im jealous! Keep up the great work! ♥
Posted by: Tinkerbell steals my lunch money on 2009-08-09, 05:04:46
As, I really liked them, their deep!!!! Keep your dream girl!!!
Posted by: Mystic on 2009-08-09, 05:07:47
Very very good. but try to have a bit more rhyming like a,b,c,a and not too many of the same words repeated.
Posted by: reverend_wulfy on 2009-08-09, 05:24:18
Great work, but try to economise a bit. What I mean is what's unsaid can have more impact than what is said. It comes across more as poetry, and as a musician(albeit it rather bad, lol), you'll have a hard time putting a melody to that. Like anything however, the more you do it, the more natural it gets. Hope I haven't come across as an arse, I really do think your lyrics are good.
Posted by: Surly Shurly on 2009-08-09, 05:34:06
Your lyrics are great. You use your own words and not cliches. Sounds like you wrote the lyrics from a life situation, which most song themes are taken from. The following part is well written, just reapeated too many times. "You never noticed how much I cared for you Until the time came where you couldn’t pull through So deep in this **** you put yourself in Even if you tried you wouldn’t be able to get out of it And you find yourself way up in the sky Cause every single night you’re getting high But my final confessions " I feel this would make the song too long. The words are great, you can visualize the story. This line "Even if you tried you wouldn’t be able to get out of it " maybe you could leave off the words "of it ".
Posted by: ~mAgdA (: on 2009-08-09, 06:26:13
Im not into this type of music, but even i have to agree this was pretty damn good :P ur a talented lyricist (is that a word? lol)
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